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  • My sarcastic ASCII pea shooter turns tongue to gymnastics
    Like a plastic hooter I'm pretty perfect and elastic

    Bounce back 'cause I'm the baddest at forgetting I'm craptastic
    I'll get with the program but remain upsetting and stochastic

    One day I'll write something that is considered classic
    Until then I'll get by on on the merits of being enthusiastic

    ...One could say that I'm the whackness
    Because if I died tomorrow a lot of people would get smacked less

    OK, I feel pretty clever right now, but it is also past 3 AM. We'll see how this reads when I wake up this afternoon.
  • edited December 2010
    Part time stock boy and my manager sold me a glock toy
    Playin' with it, holdin' my cock boy
    Bitches love to jock but fuck a hoe
    'Bout that moolah, tuckin' my dough
    I'd say check the roll but y'all cant see me
    Smokin' green weed, tokin' freely
    No reggie, this shit tastes like kiwi


    And I have to get back to work, thats all for now.

    And continuation:
    Face two Ls and still no sleepy
    Dude fucked me over, no not weeping
    Middle of the night, caught him creeping
    He tried to fight, knocked him sleeping
    One, Two, Three, bills I'm keeping
    Now ol' boy like to act decent
    Cuz he know I could delete him
    Just like that, push of a button
    And if he rat, that ain't nothin'


    More:
    I'm ridin' black insides, black paint
    Smokin' black weed until I faint
    All blacked out, like I need to lose weight
    Black blade and a black thirty-eight
    Getting cake like I had a round face
    Try to clown me get left in disgrace
    I'm smart, ain't afraid to lose face
    But I keep my pride, take a look in my eyes
    Post edited by Ilmarinen on
  • Damn, last night the p's tried to get me to snitch
    But they had no case and I ain't no bitch
    Where's the weed? I know you're high; The way the came at me was infuriating
    Don't know anybody, I'd rather die; Give me name, or we're prosecuting
    Damn, I mixed the chronology up a little
    Feel like an astrologer makin' up riddles
    Anyways, they had no case
    My friend was black so they got all in our space
    But we had nothing, not even a trace
    Don't know about robberies, get out my face
    Just had to get this off my chest
    Now I'm 'bout to lay down and rest
  • edited December 2010
    Here's a few lines I wrote, with a vaguely Christmas theme:
    I'm on some King Kong shit
    Emptying long clips on carolers, fuck that sing-song shit
    Icing huge bong hits while the barrel spits out hollow tips
    Ripping through marrow while ya shriek out hollow lips
    Your chances are narrow, follow the trail where ya blood drips
    Eighteen make me sterile beer by the pail in the whip
    Eyes glowing like coal, sack bigger than jolly ole Kris
    Wrapped around the pole, still alive, damn, I missed
    Post edited by Ilmarinen on
  • That one looks much more evenly paced than previous attempts. The more you write the more your lyrics remind me of Raekwon, which is a good thing.
  • edited December 2010
    That one looks much more evenly paced than previous attempts. The more you write the more your lyrics remind me of Raekwon, which is a good thing.
    Never thought I'd be compared to Raekwon, thanks for the compliment. Here's something I wrote just now, after finishing the first section of The Wind-Up Bird Chronicle (last part I read was the conversation with Lt. Mamiya), and it got me thinking, and I ended up with this quick stream-of-consciousness thing that is barely rap:
    Every night, I lie, waiting for sleep
    But visions of death are all I receive
    And dark depression is my grim receipt
    I dimly keep my deaths in memory
    They come to me with every dream
    And I go crazy; what does it mean?
    As if it has meaning
    I feel as though sanity is fleeting
    But do the sane know the feeling of sanity?
    And even so, do they grasp it's gravity?
    I don't know what I'm saying
    It feels like my brain has a cavity
    I live lavishly trying to stop the ravaging
    But I'm attracted to it; a ravishing tragedy
    Self-fulfilling prophecy? Mental defect?
    I tried choking and coughing on weed until I detect
    That getting fried has no effect
    Or rather, affect
    I hope this blather is far before and below my apex
    I want to be more than twenty, broke, and dateless
    But I'm hopeless and the future scares me
    Sometimes I give carelessly but I don't stop despairing
    Or I live carelessly but death doesn't care for me
    Or not yet, so until the end I'm tormented
    By my demise, until I rise; restless
    Post edited by Ilmarinen on
  • edited December 2010
    My sarcastic ASCII pea shooter turns tongue to gymnastics
    Like a plastic hooter I'm pretty perfect and elastic
    Good multis and parallel structure, from the internal rhymes to the alliteration, you structured these bars nicely and set the tone for the following rhymes. It's a great way to start a verse, showing your personality while also displaying technical competence.
    Bounce back 'cause I'm the baddest at forgetting I'm craptastic
    I'll get with the program but remain upsetting and stochastic
    Here the lyrical flexing continues, borrowing "pretty" and chaining it with "forgetting" and "upsetting", while continuing alliteration and the continuing "-stic" rhymes. The rhythm of your writing is impressive, the flow is evident just in reading.
    One day I'll write something that is considered classic
    Until then I'll get by on on the merits of being enthusiastic
    ...One could say that I'm the whackness
    Because if I died tomorrow a lot of people would get smacked less
    Lyrically less impressive than the first half, but you get your point across, keep the flow, and finish off with a clever, if somewhat corny, punchline. Nice job, it was pretty fun to read.
    Defiance of the monumental, defiance of depravity
    Hover on the instrumental in defiance of gravity

    In defiance of alliences of tyrants creating silence
    When the science drops, I'm hardly ever in compliance with the mindless

    Begnign supine whiners assigned to minor roles
    Remove their spines for use as jacket liner and tent poles

    Fuck two I've got ten balls! fuck you when my pen falls!
    Descend suspended chandaliers and then bust through walls

    With a thrust! combust spontainious,
    Nonplussed 'cause I'm the crazyiest disgust 'cause of the laziest

    Lust monkeys writing junky
    Rusty raps, how did we get so crunkly?

    [Yo Walker, how'd you get so funky?]
    I busted my nuts for months into years had the guts

    To adjust my mistrust of myself and my fears
    It's unjust to blow up in front of superior peers

    It rhymes a lot and well, and fits your old-school "MC" style, but there's really not much of a over-arcing theme? OK, but your 3AM writing was far more interesting to me. I'm not really sure how to put in words why I feel that way, but felt it was worth mentioning.

    Here's a few old rhymes I had sitting around, found them when I was going through old notebooks and loose-leaf paper.

    A wizard; high in my ivory tower
    Speak slick words imbued of power
    My eyes see through space and the ages
    In the book of history my name lurks behind the pages

    With one hand I conduct storms of fire
    The other, an orchestra of horns and lyres
    Far beneath my seat, wars rage, men tire
    Ambition, desire, funeral pyres flare higher
    I conspire; inquire to men for hire
    They admire gold; it's sold, to acquire I turn buyer
    Princely ways leave your straits dire
    Return to whence ye came if you wish to retire
    The wizards fate is to do great, I'm no liar
    But a no-trier high flier; Why deny your hate
    I can see the stress causin' you to perspirate
    Before I go I'm the best, yes, more, no less
    Success means a million and not a buck less
    If you hear this and wonder what to do next
    A lucky guess would be suppress the urge for redress
    My crew's up next and we're set to impress
    Not even a change of address
    Can take you out the range of our Techs

    Gandalf the Grey; blowin' green ganja
    Kush all day; this weed'll calm ya
    Bring drama and I comma, then commence to bomb ya
    Spit'll leave you wet up like I was a llama
    You got scarred up now I scare ya
    Try again, one more time, I dare ya
    Get hit quick wit' ease
    In my clique, in my whip, real g's
    In the clip? Let it rip, aim and squeeze
    What I be be what I see
    from the 248 to the 313
    We in the D, you see, blowin' good trees
    Want deez? Pay the fee and then leave please

    Creepin' low with the hammer outside of his house
    Ain't bout to go to the slammer over this mouse
    Peekin' through the window, they eatin' at the table
    Sneak to the front door, still stayin' way low
    Kick it down, start bustin', tryna give him a halo
    Shit, he's not in the kitchen, but daddy was laid low
    My ears prick, I hear the back door slam
    I'm like "Shit, this motherfucker musta ran"
    I give chase, weapon still in my hand
    It's dark, new moon, but I couldn't give a damn
    I got his scent in my nose, he won't escape me
    Leaves underneath my toes, I hear them crunch clearly
    Killer's instinct tells me where to aim
    Ain't feeling succinct so I'll explain
    I heard a yelp, it sounded like he must be in pain
    And at that time I remembered that it started to rain
    I ran over to the sound, saw him lyin' there twitchin'
    His eyes glazed over, I'd completed my mission
    Post edited by Ilmarinen on
  • With every line I mime out my rhymes
    Over time you'll see a dance filled with crime
    Look close, at night phantom jewelry shines
    Not materialized, but suggested by the light in my eyes
    It glows through your deceit and your lies
    You don't know who I am, this is just a disguise
    I trick mortals into thinking they're wise
    Through such a ruse you sink while I rise
    Rinse and repeat, cons and hustles complete
    Only demise and defeat if you want shit from me
  • edited January 2011
    I don't know if that quite has the elegance you were shooting for. It's hard to put my finger on why, but I think the language might be a bit cliched. I'm willing to bet that every gangsta and his cat has rhymed "rhyme" with "crime" at some point. Also, once again, it's hard to tell without hearing it, but it feels kind of uneven. I can't figure out how I would fit those lyrics to a beat without some awkward pauses or changes in tempo.

    This is possibly a pot-kettle-black situation, though. I wrote this on a napkin today.

    My head hurts like hell, vibrating like a bell
    Like a shell shocked my skull, shocked my hull and I fell straight

    Down, down, and as the pressure builds
    I can feel it in my chest like my lungs are never filled

    Afraid that I'll be killed, but there's nothing to attack
    Threats are everywhere I look, I may not make it out intact

    The shell is cracked, and for a sec somebody can see the stress so
    I turn my back and stay repressed as if to betray is to confess

    And to confess is to betray, so I stay repressed
    Disarray compressed so only simple thoughts can coalesce

    And now it's like I've got a gun and everything is target shaped
    I strike the wall and curse the sun, I fight because I can't escape

    So I claw and I beat 'til I deplete and collapse
    off my feet and withdraw to laugh while I wait to replase

    Just relax...


    It's about having a panic attack. Soon my throat will be better and I will actually record some of this stuff. DJs, where them beats at‽
    Post edited by Walker on
  • I don't know if that quite has the elegance you were shooting for. It's hard to put my finger on why, but I think the language might be a bit cliched. I'm willing to bet that every gangsta and his cat has rhymed "rhyme" with "crime" at some point. Also, once again, it's hard to tell without hearing it, but it feels kind of uneven. I can't figure out how I would fit those lyrics to a beat without some awkward pauses or changes in tempo.
    Yeah, this was not very good on the flow tip. The basis for it was the fragmented memories of a two-three hour mental flow that happened while I was on an airplane (in the fuckin' aisle seat too) at night, really tired, dehydrated, and was slightly delirious. I wrote it down mostly to get the rhymes out of my head.
    DJs, where them beats at‽
    Word, I don't have equipment right now, but I can do lo-fi or borrow some shit. I've been rhyming a bit lately and feeling pretty good about most of it, especially freestyling.
  • DJs, where them beats at‽
    Sorry, I've been sitting on this for a long time now. It's not much different from the first time you heard it save for slightly beefier production. I tried a bunch of different things to add something to the verse, but everything I did just felt like I was over-saturating it. And it's pretty saturated already, admittedly, but I can't get away from the fact that I really like busy drum machines and mc chris-style synth-driven stuff.

    I started on a new beat yesterday though, which I think will shape up to be much more like what you guys are looking for.
  • You might catch me in the club underage
    Got the fake ID you can call me James
    Bottle of Eighteen lookin' like a vase
    So I grab some flowers, roll a bouquet
    So faded but I still made my way home
    Drive straight, smoke an l to the dome
    Throwed spittin flows over the song
    Comin down offa bean super strong
    Got my head banging hard lika a gong
  • edited January 2011
    Ahhhhhhhhhh-

    Defiance of the monumental, defiance of depravity
    Hover on the instrumental in defiance of gravity

    In defiance of alliences of tyrants creating silence
    When the science drops, I'm hardly ever in compliance with the mindless

    Begnign supine whiners who consign minors to blindness
    Aligned with ignorant designs and superficial kinds of kindness

    Take your homeopath chiropractic ass back
    To the lab before you get smacked ya crackhead.

    Artificial explinations, ordinary operations
    From lying corperations to drowning in libations

    Man your stations, keep explinations pragmatic!
    Demand cessation of complacent time wastin' dogmatic

    Asshats and oversimplifications of the glorious
    Universe we in habit and we'll be victorious

    Always try to stay genteel but skeptical - let's
    Keep it real and throw our trash in the recepticle
    -hhhhhhfuck my throat hurts from writing this. When it feels better these words will be summarily rapped over Sail's beat. SPEAKING OF WHICH, I totally just realized something.
    Sorry, I've been sitting onthisfor a long time now. It's not much different from the first time you heard it save for slightly beefier production. I tried a bunch of different things to add something to the verse, but everything I did just felt like I was over-saturating it. And it's pretty saturated already, admittedly, but I can't get away from the fact that I really like busy drum machines and mc chris-style synth-driven stuff.
    There's something very satisfying about rapping over the driving beat of the bongos towards the end. It totally smooths out the vaguely halting beat you've got going throughout the rest of the song. In fact, I'm thinking that even the minimum of putting a little hi-hat or something on the afterbeats would make the rhythm much smoother.
    Post edited by Walker on
  • edited January 2011
    What if I just added the bongo sample to the verse as well?

    [Edit] Try this on for size.
    Post edited by Sail on
  • edited January 2011
    Yes. Shit yes, even. This is what was missing. My throat needs to get better faster.
    Post edited by Walker on
  • I feel like an idiot for not using that sample more prominently in the first place. It comes from the same Blowfly song that I took the opener from.
  • If you're so inclined, you could peep the endless designs
    of those who deign to profit off of the decline
    of the diligently ignorant whose reclined state of mind
    reigns while scientific theory is forgot
    and original thought is not even present in afterthought
    but this descent of consciousness doesn't inflict noxiousness
    rather it increases my wallets thickness while I conduct business
    Yes, I guess it's dishonest and ethically monstrous
    to train your prey to pay extravagant values for cheap extra-handled
    bullshit but I'll trick for chips gotta dip candor is not my card
    lay em on the table while I walk off with the bar


    Yes, bongos are nice.
  • When it feels better these words will be summarily rapped over Sail's beat.
  • When it feels better these words will be summarily rapped over Sail's beat.
    I could make a lot of maudlin excuses as to why that hasn't happened yet, and they'd all be true, but fuck that. I'll get on it soon.
  • Just reminding you :)
  • Damn, I can't even believe this shit
    My boy tried to rob me yesterday
    Wanted my pockets and my whip
    I was your brother the other day
    Now ya comin' at me like a bitch
    These're hard times an I'm hurtin'
    But I still come through wit purp
    an smoke you down out my work
    How you still gon' act like a jerk?
    Ole pussy used-to-be the shit og
    You know WB history don't try me
    I would've stuck ya but I love ya
    An I know it musta troubled ya
    Cuz I got yo calls, just ignored em
    I find it deplorable, you shoulda tried before now I'm inexorable
    I don't want to talk to you, I feel like I should've just shot you
    Even now my boys are telling me, "Homie, I got you"
    I tell em to chill cuz I still feel like I love you too much to kill
    But I'm not going to see you again unless I'm dealing out steel
  • Eh, some motherfuckers tried but none of em bust me
    On the cusp o' getting cuffed they still ain't touch me
    I guess I move too intelligently to be done crude see?
    I use cruelly and keep a toolly for rudely actin fool gs
    So wet ya look like ya got hit by a jet of hydrochloric
    I dip to a hos crib before pos hit blow hydro enormous
  • edited January 2011
    Some early morning spitting here... And some more. And more.
    Post edited by Ilmarinen on
  • This goes out to all the bitches that I left by themselves
    Understand that shit was getting complicated and well,
    I had to grab Occam's razor and cut myself
    Now I'm on that pimp shit, I make that bitch break herself
    I don't look the part cuz I move with stealth
    Same with that powder, you wouldn't know I had it
    Stepped in the game wit a nice twenty and wreaked havoc
    Flip is so good I cut deals and let tha custo beak have it
    I run the game and catch em like a hawk and a rabbit
    Once it grab 'em I laugh re-up and get back to trappin'
    Light a blunt, eat some beans and get that bitch slappin'
  • edited February 2011
    All I ever wanted to be was the dope man
    But when I see the work I fiend on that dope man
    When I lay the line I want that coke man
    Money don't bring shit, I ran out of hope man
    I blow it all tryin' to stunt but I don't man
    I break myself daily to cope so I won't man
    Lately all I want is to see the end of the road and
    I feel so alone they gave me so much rope and
    I fell so far down the hole that I lost all control and
    I don't think I can do this shit 'til I'm an old man
    I'll bang another but when I turn it to my own head
    I lose the will to continue and lay down my bone head
    Cokehead; I cook to keep it out of my hands
    Dopehead; Nobody knows what I would do for the chance
    To go back to my past and make different choices
    Make different friends and hear different voices
    To live a life that would make my parents proud
    Might be right now but they don't know what really goes down
    I need to get out of this town and change mind state
    Switch my surrounds to all new places and faces
    Stop bullshitting and start really stackin' paper
    Legally hustlin', no more servin' up j-birds
    Post edited by Ilmarinen on
  • The truth is like a snake you can't uncoil me
    I'm sitting on top killing shit like some oil b
    add a p add some d sell that shit for what I please
    Throw some to my gs, yeah, they can get much lower fees
    We up in the canopy, yall swing on lower trees
    Squealin, but that thang sing in much lower keys
    Time to exterminate, hand me the mower please
    Look into my eyes I'll make your fuckin motor freeze
    Stallin on your knees this a squall not a breeze
    I'll open up your mind better give me the keys
    You hot? nah, I hit your block like a thousand gs
    Bass poundin out my speaks, stop to take a leak
    I'm flowin like a creek blowin shit that reek
    Got some shit for the meek, you could feel like god
    For a day, for a week, beat you with that rod
    For a month, for a year, heat until it blob
    Make my momma sob but my circle gettin wads
    Nods, love from broads, but just for my guap
    Greener than guac stepped on my flip flopped
    Went the full three sixty point circle circle point
    Damn, it sucks to fall, light up another joint
    Guess it's Sisyphus, fight further uphill
    Probably goin to do this shit until I'm killed
  • Killin shots of 18 by myself gettin stupid
    Live from the couch on the arrows no cupid
    Can't find love myself how can I help you
    Every bitch I loved made me want to kill myself dude
    Real shit
    I'm bipolar and going manic
    Frantically trying to plan and keep at it
    But she got my head fucked up I'm an addict
    Two white girls I love both but don't want either
    One in my nose other one in my ear
    Both in my pockets
    Pushin me to stop it
    Stop livin cause life can't keep me driven
    I don't know how I made it this far
    Fear of death or just laziness and seein hope in the stars
    But I ain't superstitious just super stupid
    It plays out like a movie but I don't seem to be movin
    Can't understand it, pause pour another
    Wish I had lean, wish I had some comfort
    Just a bottle of eighteen, a broken house a broken mind
    What I pine for ain't mine and what I buy just draws me to another line
    another path envisioned but it's ultimately the same
    Typing this drunk, but I feel more insane
    Can't stand being in love and not being loved back
    fuck this ho what happened to my stacks
    What happened to happiness, when did that leave me
    Can't stand the world everythang is just too greazy
    sleazy disgusting and fucked up
    I'm done with getting grimy and drugged up
    Just tryin to survive without tuckin myself up
  • Face frozen, I can show no emotion
    I can have no emotion so I stay blowin doja
    Keep me grimy and slimy so I slip through the cracks
    When it's night all black at yo back that's the end of yo life click clack
    Next to my dick is the strap on my lap when I ride
    Firin wild make my foes run and hide
    Try to forget violence by being violent make my hoes run and hide
    Don't know why, when I was a kid I just cried
    Now I can't if I try tantrums ten times as vile
    don't believe in the innocence of a child
    Just the knowledge of death changin yo style
    And it fucked me up, wish my parents had fucked me up
    and told me that there was a god above that would love
    e'en if I was thug who used and sold drugs
    In reality we just like bugs and all the other animals
    Just more aware and thus a bit more fallible
    Instinct only knows survival fuck errything else
    The arrival of conscience makes life hell
    Wish I had died at birth like I should've
    Wish I had gone all the other times that I could've
    Should've, could've would've I guess I wasn't meant to
    Not that fate exists; the world by your will is bent to
    The same as words what you write is what you know
    But sometimes you spit a flow that shows what you didn't know was your own
    That shit in your bones, the life in your body
    It's somethin else entirely torture until your rotting
  • Don't fuck with drugs cuz they'll fuck your head fool
    So I'm tellin you, keep yo ego for the bedroom
    All it'll get yo ass is some head wounds or a cabinet in the dead room
    Could even leave you abandoned in the fed zoo
    Cocky motherfuckers talkin trash got me stockin the lead full
    I'm finna leave they head full so what I cock is dreadful
    All yo boys like wet pasta, so Imma put the sauce on em
    Get to smokin like a rasta when I start to toss on em
    If you'd stayed quiet all I'd do is floss on ya
    But yall lyin under crosses cuz ya got chops on ya
  • I carry a glock fuck some hip hop beef
    fightin against the clock a tick tock beef
    the ticks stop - beep! now you all deceased
    incendiaries leave nothing for the police
    You wanna stop me? dont get cold feet
    If I hear that you talking soon youll be cold meat
    Fuck some OE I'm poppin eighteen
    Roll a grape sweet I'm self medicating
    Meditating like a monk I'm chasing
    Enlightenment trying to lighten what I'm facing
    The load bears down, I feel like breaking
    Can't stop now an let'm feel like they can break me
    Not that they can I just try to keep my pride
    Look down your nose at me I ain't tryin to hide
    Clutch your rosaries when you see me outside
    I'll make you hoes bleed if you even try
    Cuz I draw on ya quick like a doodle
    Dog ya for kicks, I'm a pit you a poodle
    Now scoot along trick before I shoot you
    Subtlety is gone now I'm getting brutal
    Bubbles in the pot no longer livin frugal
    Diggin stash spots I think I lost my noodle
    My thoughts don't flow correct, no they don't connect
    Tex mex on the plate, beans on my breath
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