I was wondering if I should post this at all. I made this for the music competition of Instanssi 2012 demo-party/festival. Started making it two hours before deadline and that can be heard. I'm not that proud about it, but I shouldn't hide my creative works.
I love your flow, it's tight and interesting, however, you need to inflect your voice a bit more, add more energy, it's lying flat on the mix, make it jump.
Also, on the softer vocal section ("she's getting back together with one of my best friends...") I would suggest you lower it on the mix a bit, cut some of the middle frequencies and add a touch of reverb. It would make sound more like a section break than a badly mixed/transitioned versed. Although that's just my opinion.
Well-written lyrics, excellent articulation, and a nice varied flow. I have some gripes, though. First, you're not quite nailing the beat. An accent to beats 2 and 4 might make it easier to stay in groove. Also, continuing with that Mort said, it sounds like you're sitting too close to the mic and the volume at which you're rapping is making it sound flat and a lot less confident than it could be. Sit back a little bit and project your voice instead. You should be rapping with the same volume as a singer sings. A great way to practice this is to keep your mouth about a foot away from the mic and turn the gain down to a level where it is difficult to make it clip with your voice, then try and make it clip. Recording is more about capturing a feeling than a perfect take, and forcing yourself to have to strain is a trick that helps emulate/fake intensity. It's like theater, you have to exaggerate things in order for them to come across clearly.
FUCK OFF WITH THAT WALL OF TEXT SAIL. THE FIRST AND MOST IMPORTANT PART IS THAT THAT DELICIOUS VOICE IS SLIGHTLY STRANGLED OUT BY THE MUSIC. IT'S A BIT TOO SUBDUED AND QUIET, THOUGH JUST INCREASING THE GAIN WILL PROBABLY BE A HORRENDOUS IDEA.
Well-written lyrics, excellent articulation, and a nice varied flow. I have some gripes, though. First, you're not quite nailing the beat. An accent to beats 2 and 4 might make it easier to stay in groove. Also, continuing with that Mort said, it sounds like you're sitting too close to the mic and the volume at which you're rapping is making it sound flat and a lot less confident than it could be. Sit back a little bit and project your voice instead. You should be rapping with the same volume as a singer sings. A great way to practice this is to keep your mouth about a foot away from the mic and turn the gain down to a level where it is difficult to make it clip with your voice, then try and make it clip. Recording is more about capturing a feeling than a perfect take, and forcing yourself to have to strain is a trick that helps emulate/fake intensity. It's like theater, you have to exaggerate things in order for them to come across clearly.
Agreed on all points. Sometimes I'm right on, a lot of the time I'm way off the beat. As for the soft voice, it was the only way I could find to relax into it. My next step is to work on relaxing the flow while projecting, and actually recording with headphones on so I can catch the accents on the downbeat (trust me, they're there).
I really like that. The beat is great and the aggressive vocals work well. My one criticism is that the right channel feels a bit heavy. I'd suggest, rather than adding a new element to offset the drums, using automation to increase the volume of that distorted piano in the left channel during those parts.
I'm in the process of writing some verses for a ratatat beat, trying to get back into writing lyrics frequently again. I'll post something once I have a full cut. Also Walker I am diggin' those beats. Perhaps a collaboration at some point?
I'm in the process of writing some verses for a ratatat beat, trying to get back into writing lyrics frequently again. I'll post something once I have a full cut. Also Walker I am diggin' those beats. Perhaps a collaboration at some point?
If I like what I hear. No offense meant, of course, but I don't want to work with somebody if I don't like how they sound.
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I was wondering if I should post this at all. I made this for the music competition of Instanssi 2012 demo-party/festival. Started making it two hours before deadline and that can be heard. I'm not that proud about it, but I shouldn't hide my creative works.
Give me your thoughts, understanding that it is completely unfinished.
Edit: If you want to go on the weird side, try adding some sitar as one of the melodic breaks.
Improved. Keep the feedback coming if you have it, y'all are helping a lot.
Long Miles, Small Smiles by Yossarian.
It feels good to be rapping again.
Also, on the softer vocal section ("she's getting back together with one of my best friends...") I would suggest you lower it on the mix a bit, cut some of the middle frequencies and add a touch of reverb. It would make sound more like a section break than a badly mixed/transitioned versed. Although that's just my opinion.
Now you can read Sail's wall of tl;dr.
His voice is too damn soft!
Go Home by Yossarian.
New Boss by Yossarian.
Also, here's me reciting poems with my friend playing piano in the background.
Poems, Piano and Pretension with Pleats and Kato by Yossarian.
Scattershot by Yossarian.
Scattershot by Yossarian.